“In thinking about an idea, many sentences and ideas can be drawn by using detailed words within the idea”
The idea of this sentence of ideas is correct, however I for one have heard the word idea to many times at this point. At its base, this quote is saying when you have a thought it can branch of into many other thoughts. Although that this statement may be true, I believe the quote goes about saying it the wrong way. As I mentioned the first thing I noticed is how sick of the word idea I got by the end of it. Also the sentence feels as though it could be separated into two different sentences. If the writer broke the sentence up into one or two sentences, each explaining a part of the process described in the original, then it might make it easier to understand. Breaking up the sentence may also allow the writer to better convey what it is he or she means. I believe the sentence does get its point across, but that it could do so more clearly and creating more flow if it is approached differently, such as breaking it up.
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